Tara+Mayfield

Unfamiliar Genre Project: Edited, Updated and Completed (21 February 2012)

[|Evaluate and Judge Rough Draft.docx]

As you say, this review is a beginning. Given the age of the film, some historical context might be in order. When was the film shot and when did it actually take place in Hollywood's history? Is it better or worse than the usual "washed-up" celebrity story? How would we view it differently than when it first came out? Is it even relevant to today's Hollywood? Then, of course, you can go into the acting, the costumes and sets, the pace of the story and the camera angles. All this is relevant for the film medium. 17/20 for a very short draft.

[|Skyline Correspondence Letters.doc]

[|Tara student writer profile.docx]

You gain significant insight from the limited evidence in this study. Appreciating the volume of unassigned writing that a student produces helps you recognize her strengths. Your points about the organization of her narrative are well-taken, because the emphasis shifts from sibling rivalry to the injury itself. I would be more cautious about changing the writer's style, since it needs nurturing in its early stages. Most significant stylistic issues are appropriateness for audience and repetitive or wordy style. Otherwise recognize that it is evolving and needs space to grow.

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